I like it, good content, but ... (4.00 / 2)

It feels unfinished. The ending isn't a summary, it doesn't tie back to the beginning, seems like someone just said, 'eh, it's too long, we're tying it off here.'

Anyway, needs some polishing, but a strong effort.

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by: Natasha Chart @ Tue Apr 22, 2008 at 05:26:04 AM UTC

Yeah (0.00 / 0)

I don't feel like it defines him along the lines anyone else is defining him. I think it would be better to further emphasize that he just doesn't care very much about the economy.

I know that that's the punch line, but it seemed weirdly understated.

I support John McCain because children are too healthy anyway.

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by: Sam L @ Tue Apr 22, 2008 at 14:30:33 PM UTC

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Fabulous - more like this please! (0.00 / 0)

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by: obsessed @ Tue Apr 22, 2008 at 05:54:12 AM UTC